関曉雩(澳洲) 发表于 2011-11-2 17:28:24

可以帮我改改吗

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周密(日本) 发表于 2011-11-2 18:03:01

那一首帮你改了,这一首我得有空再说,现在有些顺口溜的感觉啊<img src="image/face/18.gif" class="face">

威廉(SWISS) 发表于 2011-11-9 08:39:55

红,芳,容字反复出现。。。正月至十二月可用寅月至寒冬表示,<br />
或以节气。。。写诗太费脑子,文学功底要厚,我不行,我仅提提意见。。。
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